It seemed like yesterday When I turned eight,
I can't believe it is my last day of being eight.
The presents, the fun being with everyone .
I can't wait to just let loose and have some fun!
The cake, the party, everything is great.
I can't believe it is my last day of being eight.
I still remember my 8th birthday, it was so great,
I just can't believe it really is my last day of being eight.
I can't believe it is my last day of being eight.
The presents, the fun being with everyone .
I can't wait to just let loose and have some fun!
The cake, the party, everything is great.
I can't believe it is my last day of being eight.
I still remember my 8th birthday, it was so great,
I just can't believe it really is my last day of being eight.
"It seemed like yesterday When I turned eight,"
ReplyDelete(If rearranged your words as above you can keep the rhyme, meanwhile the mixing with past tense and present tense in a sentence- a grammatical anomaly- can also be avoided)
"I still remember my 8th birthday, it was so great."
(By deleting 'to see' from your original line you can once again keep the rhyme without effecting the concept or meaning.)
Given the age of the writer, the poem is great!
Well done, Aashna!